Re-Write
ACT 01
INT. LIVING ROOM – 03’S APARTMENT – CONTINUOUS – NIGHT
WE PULL BACK FURTHER
CLOSE ON CONDOM
CLOSE ON KLEENEX
CLOSE ON NEEDLE
CLOSE ON STYROFOME SOUP BOWL
03
( continuing)
Come on let’s get outta here.
02
(continuing)
Where? I got nowhere else to go.
Cut to:
03 smirks.
01 thinks a second.
02 laughs –( to herself)
03 cuts her off…
She pauses. She buzzes. She waits.
A beat of awkward silence.
FADE UP ON A BRIGHT RED SUN
ACT 02
INT. LOCKED ROOM SHED – NIGHT
He’s wearing street clothes. A tight tee shirt, ragged acid wash jeans, a bulky, oversize wool jacket, scuffed black runners, no socks and a faded Planet Hollywood baseball cap.
02 enters an INDUSTRIAL SECTION of town. She sees the OCEAN in the distance. – and the GIANT CRANES that unload ships.
03 roars around a corner – fishtails – sideswipes a parked van and keeps going.
A Police Car pulls out of an alley and tries to block the road.
CLOSE ON – TELEVISION NEWS ANNOUNCER
REVEAL…
DESERTED INDUSTRIAL AREA (AKA –THE STROLL)
PAN TO…
BILLBOARD – grim faced City Coroner looks down at shrouded body lying on ground, tag line reads: 13 Fresh Ones.
WE PUSH IN CLOSE – ON DUMPSTER
A POLICE CRUISER pulls into the vacant lot – slowly glides around the perimeter – stops beside what looks like a pile of garbage.
COP – calls in to dispatch
We’ve got a problem
ACT 03
INT. CARGO VAN
03 looks backwards INTO THE REAR VIEW MIRROR
– only to see …
OVERHEAD VIEW – of run down street filled with cheap hotels
SECURITY GUARD
THE SECURITY GUARD’s P.O.V. of – caged off area behind boarded up building.
EXTREME CLOSE UP of an old TELEVISION with a smashed in screen.
MEDIUM CLOSE ON – FEET RUNNING – FAST.
REVEAL…
The light changes, car horns blow raucously as the girl runs out into traffic flow, dodging cars, just missing being hit by a bus and then slipping away down a dark alley.
A new angle REVEALS :
EXT. ALLEY – DAY – RAIN
CLOSE ON :
A young woman, looking old and chewed up in ratty clothes,
TITLES: ANGELA DAWN. DISAPPEARED NOVEMBER 11, 1988.
ACT 04
EXT. CITY STREET – DAY
Candace : How did she get there?
Candace’s POV of Angela ducking into dingy doorway.
CHARACTER 01
Dialogue…….
CHARACTER 01 ( CONT’D)
Dialogue…
(and then)
Dialogue…
CHARACTER 02
Dialogue……
(a moment and then)
Dialogue
EXT. CITY – SKY VIEW
Cut to:
SEDAN cruising city streets - NIGHT
ACT 5
FADE UP ON ALLEY – DUMPSTERS – PUDDLES FILLED WITH TRASH
NEW ANGLE REVEALS: Caged back porch of building backing on to alley.
Door opens, tired looking, middle aged woman steps out to light a cigarette, stops, looks down and fiddles with lighter, looks up and gasps.
EXTREME CLOSEUP of her face as she shouts the word – HELP!
WOMAN’S POV: Looking through WIRE CAGE to TALL, OLD TREE on edge of vacant lot behind building. Hanging from a branch in the tree is what appears to be a woman’s corpse.
PULL BACK as woman runs back inside building, doors slams shut. Signage on door reads: WOMEN’S SHELTER.
CUT TO: OVERHEAD VIEW Set Dressers on LADDER awkwardly removing prop of strangled corpse down out of tree. PULL BACK to reveal FILM TRUCKS, CAMERA further along alley. CREW milling around, Director throwing up hands, Principles shaking heads.
FADE IN : Busy Film Production Office, Location Manager - on phone looking rueful, Assistant - filing, listening to conversation and shrugging, Secretary - typing, rolls eyes…
EXTREME CLOSEUP of page coming out of printer –TEXT READS: … We realize your neighbourhood entertains it's fair share of filming and we are sensitive to concerns about filming in the area…
FADE OUT
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